I have been going to school since January 2012, I have
not had the chance to do a lot of reading other than math books. However, I went
into my library and found a novel by Clive Cussler titled “The Chase”. As I flipped
thru the pages of this book, I found a great example of the description detail
which is part of the section called “Style”. I highly recommend Clive Cussler as an author to read.
The excerpt is: Danzler could size up a man as precisely as
he could a horse. The intruder was tall and lean, stood well over six feet, and
weighed no more than one hundred seventy-five pounds. A large flaxen mustache
that covered his entire upper lip conformed with the thick mass of neatly
barbered blond hair. His hands and fingers were long and nimble and hung loosely,
almost casually, at his sides. There was a no-nonsense look about him. The colonel
judged that this was a man who dealt with substance and did not endure fools or
insignificant and phony candor. He had a determined set to the chin and lips
that were spread in a friendly smile. Danzler guessed his age at about thirty.
He was dressed immaculately in a white linen suit without a
wrinkle. A heavy gold chain dipped from the left vest pocket that was attached
to a large gold watch inside his the right pocket. A low-crowned hat with a
wide brim sat squarely on his head. Danzler might have pegged him as a dandy,
but the look of elegance was betrayed by a pair of worn leather boots that had
seen many hours in stirrups. Bell carried a thin valise and set it down beside
the table.
The editing mistake for the week comes from an article I found
on the net earlier this week. Please be advised it came from an article about a
threat against the President. I am only going to show the section that had the
mistake not the entire article. The title of the article is Creepy viral video
contains hidden threat to kill Barack Obama. The sentence reads “The the numbers are the
GPS coordinates for the … President”. This should have been caught at the time
this article was being written.
I have read a few books by Clive Cussler and while they are written well, I find that they all start reading the same. He uses wonderful descriptions but the voice of each of his books is too similar for my liking. "The The," is one of my favorite errors.
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